Poem of the Day: “Slanted Ceilings” by David Pring-Mill

Songs of Eretz Poetry Review is pleased to present “Slanted Ceilings” by David Pring-Mill.  A brief biography of the poet may be found here:   http://eretzsongs.blogspot.com/2015/07/poem-of-day-that-stomping-sensibility.html.

Slanted Ceilings

David Pring-Mill

The roof is tilted,

providing a gentle suggestion

to gentle rain.

I don't know if I prefer

pitter-patter above my dry head, like

acrylic nails tapping

upon dollhouse ceiling,

Or

The mist around me,

and the actual touch

of earthly presence.

I slip into shoes,

heading outside,

with a modest hope.

Poet's Notes:  "Slanted Ceilings" is a poetic expression of two competing comforts. I wanted to write a poem about the ways that the world offers us subtle connection and reassurance.

Editor’s Note:  This is an interesting, modern twist on the sonnet form.  The poet’s use of personification in the second line is nicely done, as is his repetition of "gentle" in the third line, evoking the sound of rain.  The turn in line eight, while perhaps abrupt, nicely ushers in the imagery and feel of the surrounding mist.  The final stanza is lovely, if not a bit breathtaking.