James Frederick William Rowe
I
In the Great War
The flare of a match
The blossoming fire
The sulfuric scorch
With its black whiff
Of acrid smoke
Being brought to the
tip
Of a soldier's
cigarette
Pinched between
fingers
Touched by frost
Filthy with the trench
Could reveal a
position
Paint a target
For an enemy marksman
to strike
A deadly comfort
This tobacco
II
The danger remains:
Shunned from society
Cast into the no-man's
land
Before the warm glow
Of the bar
Smoke sheltered
beneath
A steel scaffold
The lit embers
Abob beneath streams
Of blue-grey smoke
Like fireflies
In a hazy dusk
Whilst passersby
Cast censorious gazes
Moral snipers from
Distant trenches
Using the glow of the tip
As bull's eyes for
their sharp-shooting
Of their silent judgment
Of their disdainful gaze
Poet’s Notes: This
poem derived its inspiration from an outing with my friend Patrick last year
(thus "2015" as opposed to "2016"). We had gone out for
beer and food at our favorite bar, Churchill's on 28th off
Park Avenue in New York, when I was waiting in the cold for him to come out. I
noticed the common sight of the huddled bodies of smokers braving the cold and
smoking their cigarettes, and the disdain indicative both in pushing them outside the bar (thanks, Michael Bloomberg!) and in the way people looked at
them as they passed. For such a society that has abandoned moral principles, it
has always interested me how people who choose to smoke are regarded as the new
villains of society.
The scene of the smokers also
reminded me of a story I once heard about cigarette smoking soldiers in the
Great War and how their matches were often used by snipers to discern their
position. This vulnerability actually led to the development of the cigarette
lighter, interestingly enough, and so I thought to expand the immediate sense
impression that sparked the poem to include this idea. I thought this fitting,
given that they were standing outside a bar called Churchill's--although Churchill is remembered
most for his influence in securing victory for Britain in the Second World War,
he was a military commander during the First. Likewise, the pointed glares of
the moral judges on the street reminded me of someone ready to pull a trigger.
Aesthetically, this poem is a
bit of a departure for me. The first and second stanzas are of unequal lengths,
and I have taken to experimenting with part divisions in the poem. Several of
my English Department type friends have written poems with this style, and
because I simply couldn't think of how I could expand the first stanza enough,
or trim the second stanza sufficiently, I decided to let the part divisions
function to effectively allow the two parts to stand as aesthetically different
from one another. This is even revealed in a change of tense in the second
stanza, such that the poem appears almost as two halves connected tenuously by
the subject matter, which harkens back to the title's emphasis on a date span,
and how contrasts are often shown in history books or articles which compare
older matters to contemporary concerns.
Also, so not to appear too
much in the pocket of Philip-Morris, I do play with the idea of tobacco as an
inherently unhealthy vice in Part I where I affirm the "deadly
comfort" which is tobacco. Admittedly, in this case I mean that it was
good for snipers, but I don't think I need to pull up cancer statistics.
Editor’s Note: I live near the National
WWI Museum. Having visited it on several occasions, I can with a modicum
of expertise state that Mr. Rowe has captured the feeling of WWI in part I of
the poem, including most especially the irony of a war no one really
wanted. His use of WWI as metaphor or conceit in part II is cleverly
done, too.
As a physician, I am of course
firmly against smoking. However,
as a libertarian, I do believe that smokers have the right to be stupid--as
long as they accept the responsibility to keep their smoke out of innocent faces
and pay extra for health, life, car, and home owner’s insurance.
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